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[cpolk]

Well, here it is at ten minutes to midnight and I have

read the story again
fixed some sentence fussing
aknowledged that there was still a problem with one character's motivation being up there on the page
got advice from matociquala to just put his motivation down in one blunt sentence
put that sentence in exactly where it should go, and
added another sentence that inclues the reader on my protag's perception of the character, adding a layer of irony for the reader's benefit

It's ready to go! and my Friendslist Straw poll agrees: next stop, Asimov's. which is exactly where it's headed.

Now if only my paperback copies of Thomas Harlan's Oath of Empire series wasn't shedding pages... they're new books! it's making me sad.